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谁能帮我改改四级作文模板啊(急用)

Withthedevelopmentofhumancivilizaitionaswellasthesignificantimprovementofscienceoftechnologyandduetotherapidchangesinoursociety,moreandmorepeopleareconcerningaboutwhether____.Asaresult,thetopicof___isincreasinglybecomingthemostcontroversyrecently,whichraisesmanyissuesinthesociety.

ThatremindsmeofanoldChinesesayingwhichgoes”eachcoinhastwosides”.Differentpeopleholddiffentkindsofopinionstowardit.Asaresult,theattitudestowardthisissuevaryfrompersontoperson.

Someareinclinedtotheopinionsthat______,theyholdtheviewsforthefollowingfactors:inthefirstplace,theypointoutthefactthat___.Acaseinpointisthat____,whatismore,itisnoteasytoseethat____.

Whereasotherpeopleontheotherhandprefertothepointthat____,astheybelieve____,asanillustration,_____.

AsfarasIamconcerned,Iamfullyinfavoroftheopinionthat______.Ifirmlybelievethatyouwillbenefitalotfromit.

Ontheotherhand,however,itisersiersaidthandone.Practiceisthemostimportantfactor,onlywhenyoupayattentiontoitandputitintosociallives.Canyouholditsoonerorlater?

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  1.第一句太长了,中间有重复的部分,dueto后面的部分和前面合成一句话:Withthedevelopmentofhumancivilizaitionaswellasthesignificantsocialandtechnologicalchanges,moreandmore...   开头一句过长,有头重脚轻的感觉.   另外,"moreandmorepeople怎样怎样"是中学生用法,宜用peopleinremarkablyincreasingnumberare...,或者amultitudeofpeople...   2.后两句意思完全一样的:Differentpeopleholddiffentkindsofopinionstowardit(不同的人有不同的观点),Asaresult(因此),theattitudestowardthisissuevaryfrompersontoperson.(不同的人观点不同).   把Asaresult后面那句改成:Asaresult,significantemphasizeareputtingonthecompellingargumentssupportingeachassertionasfollows:   正好顺接论点   3.倒数第四行开始,拼写错误:itiseasier(ersier)...   最后一句话不通,没有putintosociallife之说,改成:onlywhenyoupayattentiontoitandputitintogeneralandsocialpractice,canyouindeedhandleitsoonerorlater.   最后,既然准备了这么长的模板,希望你不要背错单词.
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